More P.E.E. writing - Abbie's

I am learning to P.E.E. in my writing - have a main point/topic sentence as the first sentence, then I elaborate. 

Tupare gardens is a public garden in New Plymouth. Tupare has a river at the end of the gardens. There is a swimming hole in one part of it. The swimming hole is really deep. The river has a very fast current and there are some steps to get down to the river. The river is called the Waiwhakaiho. There are eels in the river that come out at night. The eels normally live at the end of the swimming hole by the bank. Tupare gardens are recommended by local people. If you like to look at gardens, this is the place to go.

If you are curious about Tupare gardens go to this website http://www.trc.govt.nz/tupare-home/

Written by Abbie

I am learning to P.E.E. in my writing - have a main point/topic sentence as the first sentence, then I elaborate.

The Cascade Cliff

Here you will explore of the amazing history the Cascade Cliff at Tupare Gardens. The Cascade Cliff took 4 winters to build and some rocks from the Waiwhakaiho River made the stone in the Waterfall. The Cascade Cliff was named after a good friend of Russell Matthews his name was Cliff. The waterfall was made in winter because Russell Matthews had to build roads in the summer. The water flows when the tide of the river is high but when the tide of the river is low then it doesn’t flow as much water. The water from the river is the water from the Cascade Cliff so the Cascade Cliff’s water comes from the Waiwhakaiho river. The water flows underground to get to the Cascade Cliff. 

By Eliala

Cascade Cliffs Cascade Cliffs is a  small waterfall in Tupare Gardens. It was built in the winter because Russell Mathews had work in the summer. Cascade Cliffs took 4 winters to build. It got its name from Russell Mathews good friend who thought that Cascade Cliffs was a good name for a waterfall. The rocks from the waterfall came from the Waiwhakaiho River. There are rings of rocks with water in them what makes the Cascade Cliffs.

Here is a web sight to see the Cascade Cliffs:

http://pommepal.files.wordpress.com/2014/03/tupare-house-and-gardens-pc-sx40-038_4000x3000.jpg

By Emily

PEE when I write (Point, Elaborate, Elaborate)

Today one of our writing groups was working on using P.E.E. in their writing. Here is what we discussed and our thinking around it.

I am learning to P.E.E. in my writing - have a main point/topic sentence as the first sentence, then I elaborate.

Audience: Teacher, People that have never been to Tupare

Task: Write a short magazine article about one special feature in Tupare

P.E.E.

P = Point (main point/topic sentence)

E = Elaboration (explain the main point a bit)

E = Elaboration (explain the main point a bit more)

Example:
At Frankley School we have a wonderful bush area at the back of our school. A couple of years ago we put possum traps up there. The bush has heaps of native birds and plants. In our bush we have a bush track.

Non Fiction Writing/Factual writing about a topic = true, real	Fiction Writing = made up
We don't usually use personal pronoun words like we, I, me, my True facts	imaginative language

Writing Sentences

In writing today, one of our groups were discussing what a sentence is. We need to learn this because we are not at the level of writing proper sentences that make sense yet. Here are our ideas...

"I am learning to use sentences".

What we know about sentences…

Sentences start with a capital letter and end with a full stop.

Sentences have one idea in them.

Sentences have to have at least 3 words in them.

Sentences need to make sense.